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Ur_Mom's_Unkle Second in command
Posts : 147 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 31 Location : Arizona
| Subject: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 10:54 pm | |
| My Brave Hero:
O, brave hero, I sit alone in the cold night wind, Holding your pelt close to my chest. My fingers skim across your corpse, Feeling every scrape and wound embedded in it; The teeth and claw marks scar your grey fur.
O, brave hero, to think, just moments before, You and I were trotting through the woods, The same way we would every day.
O, brave hero, if only we’d stayed on the path And not wandered off, you’d still be here with me. Why o’ why did we have to go astray? We would not have run into trouble had we stayed on the path.
O, brave hero, if only we’d known what awaited us deep in the woods, We could’ve avoided the danger that caused us so much pain. The incident with the fierce grizzly that took your life Would not have occurred if we’d gone down the well-known path.
O, brave hero, why did this happen to us? Why did you have to leave me here alone?
O, brave hero, already I miss you. I miss the way you would pounce on me in the mornings, Or how you would lick my face, whenever given the chance.
O, brave hero, the only joy I can bring myself now Is the thought that we will one day be reunited. And we can trot through the gates of heaven, Just you and me, O, brave hero.
- Me | |
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Christ! Admin
Posts : 117 Join date : 2009-06-01 Age : 29 Location : Sequim
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 10:58 pm | |
| Kick ass Dan. That's powerful. | |
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jjjhs
Posts : 92 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 30 Location : Indianapolis, Indiana
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 10:59 pm | |
| Daniel that was beautiful. Omg Geesh I wish I could captivate an audience like that! | |
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Ur_Mom's_Unkle Second in command
Posts : 147 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 31 Location : Arizona
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:01 pm | |
| Lul thanks. ;D
My teacher asked me if this actually happened to me. I was like "Yea my dog and I were walkin' through a forest and got attacked by a bear" :} | |
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jjjhs
Posts : 92 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 30 Location : Indianapolis, Indiana
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:02 pm | |
| I lol'd. Oh dear. I'll try to find one of my poems. ;/ | |
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Ur_Mom's_Unkle Second in command
Posts : 147 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 31 Location : Arizona
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:04 pm | |
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jjjhs
Posts : 92 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 30 Location : Indianapolis, Indiana
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:06 pm | |
| Garr. Nevermind I'm reading them. They are so lame xD | |
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Ur_Mom's_Unkle Second in command
Posts : 147 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 31 Location : Arizona
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:07 pm | |
| Lulul. ;D
We could give you helpful criticism though. So you could like make it better. | |
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jjjhs
Posts : 92 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 30 Location : Indianapolis, Indiana
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:10 pm | |
| Eh, maybe. I'll find one I made on meez. | |
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Ur_Mom's_Unkle Second in command
Posts : 147 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 31 Location : Arizona
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:13 pm | |
| Harhar, I found some little story things that I wrote over a year ago. xD
I never realized how much I improved in my writing. | |
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jjjhs
Posts : 92 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 30 Location : Indianapolis, Indiana
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:13 pm | |
| You're really good from what I can tell. | |
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Ur_Mom's_Unkle Second in command
Posts : 147 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 31 Location : Arizona
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:15 pm | |
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jjjhs
Posts : 92 Join date : 2009-06-02 Age : 30 Location : Indianapolis, Indiana
| Subject: Re: My Brave Hero Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:18 pm | |
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